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  1. Thanks! This haiku prompted me to write this. Any impressions? Salvageable?

    Boys in a Pasture (for Winslow Homer)

    ten moved on to wives
    passels of grandkids
    two died in Iraq
    two went fairly mad
    one became a CEO
    three are millionaires
    one in jail for murder
    one who wed a man;
    five divorced, in campers,
    behind their mother’s house
    three smashed by every sunset
    and sometimes all week long.

    yet once upon a pasture
    a last equality, relinquished
    to the July sun and grass
    beneath our feet, sunburnt
    hunter-gatherers of frogs
    and snakes and perch,
    but only one a poet
    the one who never left.

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  2. Maybe stanzas would help…

    Boys in a Pasture (for Winslow Homer)

    ten moved on to wives
    passels of grandkids

    two died in Iraq
    two went fairly mad

    one became a CEO
    three are millionaires

    one in jail for murder
    one who wed a man;

    five divorced, in campers,
    behind their mother’s house

    three smashed by every sunset
    and sometimes all day long.

    yet once upon a pasture
    a last equality, relinquished

    to the July sun and grass
    beneath our feet, sunburnt

    hunter-gatherers of frogs
    and snakes and perch,

    but only one a poet
    the one who never left.

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  3. Speaking of boys in a pasture, or mostly departed it, an old pal texted me this a couple of weeks ago. His first poem ever. What would be your advice to him?

    For the cheap
    price of $9.99
    with only cheese
    and wine,
    she let him hit it
    from behind

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