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  1. Interesting! The choice of the word ‘scribble’ gives this one a bit of a surreal quality. To this reader it’s almost onomatopoeic, like a cat scrambling across the floor in the middle of the night (a sound I’m all too familiar with).

    Perhaps the poet is playfully commenting on the stereotypically ‘dashed-off’ quality of so much short verse?

    Like most things around midnight, the edges of this word, and by extension this verse, is intriguingly indistinct. I get the sense of a waking dream, where for a moment, sense is all mixed up.

    • I love your speculation so much that I’m just going to shut my mouth. =) I’m glad one of these inspired you to write. As we’ve already discussed, this time of year can really be a trial. Each day is like the last.

  2. You are very kind to indulge my ‘creative reading’ habit, as my wife once worded it. Perhaps too kind!

    Funny you should mention that monotony of summer. This morning I was drafting a comment in sympathy with your August 4th haiku when I noticed that ‘endless fields’ had turned into ‘whithered fields’ and then into ‘crack-ling fields’.

    To be sure, I enjoy ‘crack-ling fields’ the most— but I must also agree that summer’s fields do seem particularly endless this year.

    • I liked endless too, and for the same reason I think; but it just seemed a little weak to me. I loved the image of the rolling sun and “endless” didn’t seem to quite do it justice. The haiku felt top heavy to me. So I changed the word order a bit and tried crack-ling. I had thought of that at the outset but, in the last hours of wakefulness, decided against it—then changed my mind the next day. But crackling is a concrete image where endless is not. It’s more abstract, and I very much prefer avoiding abstractions in my haiku. There’s more poetry in the concrete; and haiku only have a brief moment in which to make an impression, and so something vivid. Anyway, that’s some of my philosophy of haiku. Most other blogging writers of haiku, I notice, lean mostly toward abstractions. That’s very much the western tradition. :)

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