August 7th 2017

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left
····behind at the water’s edge—his clothes and
········hers
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218 August 7th 2017 | bottlecap
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2 responses

    • Not sure how that’s a different “version” of mine? If anything, it might be a senryu, but what’s missing is that trick in haiku that makes the reader smile or pause—an association that he or she might have missed until reading the haiku. Not all haiku/senryu do this, but the best mostly have this in common.

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