July 16th 2016

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Lately, and every night, I almost think I’m out of ideas. Just let it go for one night. But I don’t. Not yet. I’ve noticed, recently, that the habit of thought in writing haiku, of imagery, begins influence my writing in general. I like that.
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253 July 16th 2016 | bottlecap
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8 responses

  1. Thank you, once again, Patrick, for what I often think of each day as my morning devotional with you. I have even begun to experience anticipatory grieving over what I’ll be missing when your year is up!

    • Thank you HD, I’m also of two minds about the year’s close. I’m not sure I want to stop. :-) We’ll see. In the mornings I love that I’ve written so much, and in the evenings I can’t imagine writing another.

  2. Another bounce-off-your blog poem—like in less than a minute. Believe I got the title right.

    This Poem I Fail

    This poem I must
    From habit
    Or anxiety
    Or anxiety
    Of no habit.
    Must
    As a stone that weighs
    Me down to sculpt
    Until it floats
    Ascends!
    Until its rapture sweeps the earth
    The stone
    Beneath it.

  3. And, btw, I second hdgideonse on your haiku. You say they influence your writing in general. Do you also mean with longer poems?

  4. Thanks for your feedback on the poem. It took 24 hrs but now the last two lines hit me the same way. Does this version mitigate the syntactical obscurity? (The grandiosity is intended but not the empty obscurity.)

    This Poem I Fail

    This poem I must
    From habit
    Or anxiety
    Or anxiety
    Of no habit
    Must
    As a stone that weighs
    Me drown or sculpt
    Until it floats
    Ascends
    Behold! its rapture span the sky
    The stone
    Beneath it
    Live.

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